6 Things You’re Flubbing in Your Marketing Emails

Carol Tice

I’ve been reading a lot of writers’ letters of introduction lately as part of an online-writing bootcamp I put on.

An LOI is a short email you send to introduce yourself to prospective businesses or trade-publication editors. These are also known as marketing emails or prospecting emails.

I learned a lot reviewing participants’ letters. I learned why so often, these emails don’t get you clients.

There are some basic, common mistakes I saw over and over. Avoid these, and your pitch has a much better chance of landing you a gig.

Here are the six problem areas I’ve found in writers’ email marketing pitches:

  1. No research. Have you looked at this company or publication’s website and compared it to its competitors? You should be able to tell the prospect something about their marketing materials that you’ve noticed is missing — something you could write. Find out what the best companies in their sector are doing — then, suggest they do it. Or read the publication, so you can comment on a recent story.
  2. No connection. Are you randomly sending emails to companies you found in the phone book, whether or not you have any expertise in their industry? That makes for a weaker pitch. Focus on industries or publications where you can claim some relevant life or writing experience, and you’ll have a much better chance of convincing them you are the writer they need. It doesn’t have to be a lot of experience, or even recent — I was a legal secretary an eon ago, and I’ve used that to land literally tens of thousands of dollars of assignments. Your connection might just be that you are their customer and use their products — that can work great.
  3. Not using their tone. Companies have a culture, and a style to how they communicate. Some are formal, others humorous, still others casual. To grab a prospect’s attention, you need to speak their language. Writing in their tone tells prospects you know their company — and you get them.
  4. Not saying who you are. Some letters of introduction could be mistaken for fan mail. The writer gushes about how great the company or magazine is — but without saying at the top “I’m a writer,” your prospect might quickly scan the top of your letter and then toss it, never realizing you were a writer looking for a gig.
  5. No personality. You want to inject a little bit of who you are into this letter, so that it’s almost like meeting you and chatting in person.
  6. Not asking for the gig. Each marketing letter should end with some kind of call to action. What do you want your prospect to do next — pick up the phone and call you? Be ready for your followup call next week? End with a clearly defined next step. Asking for permission to send a few links to your clips can be a great closer that allows the prospect to take a low-risk action that keeps you in touch and building the relationship.


  1. Mitt Ray

    Great Post Carol – Like you mentioned research and call to action are extremely important. Using the information you gather from the research you can let them know that you understand them and the call to action will give them that gentle nudge which will make them to contact you. -Mitt

  2. Anne Wayman

    Carol when I was trained as a high-tech headhunter back in the day I had to teach my clients to ask for the job. So many people hesitate to do that, yet how else will the employer/client know you’re interested?

    btw, love the pix.

    • Carol Tice

      Ha! See my post Monday — asking for the job gets a mention.

      Without that ask, your LOI can so easily seem confusing, where the reader is wondering what the heck you WANT out of them. Is it fan mail? You’re a management consultant? Linda Formichelli likes to end query letters with, “May I write this article for you?” Really spells it out.

  3. Linda Bryant

    Incredibly concise, helpful and relevant. Thanks Ed!


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